Thursday 19 May 2016
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I like how you have used lots of descriptive language especially when you created the picture in my head of you being yelled at. I think something will help make your work better is the use of commas and full stops. Where did your idea for this story come from?
ReplyDeleteHi Amiele I like how you started each slide as if they were pages of a diary I also like how you used lots of descriptive words! I think you should add in a little bit more punctuation.Other than that I love your work!
ReplyDeleteHi Amiele, I like how you started each slide as if they were pages of a diary. I also like how you used lots of descriptive words! I think you could add in a little bit more punctuation. Other than that I love your work! from Sione
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