Based on ‘The ANZAC Puppy’ by Peter Millett and Trish Bowles
WALT Write a flashback from a different perspective and use show not tell
I enjoyed writing this because we got to imagine what it was like at war and writ about it. Next time I will add more descriptive words
At war it was misty and you could see my breath in the air. Every few seconds you could hear and feel crashes and bangs of the explosions. Every time they were set off it would leave a ringing noise in my ear. I would jump every time I heard one. I felt home sick and no matter how long you were there you would never get used to it.
Down in the trenches I was with one of the few people who would keep me company, my dog Freda. Though the ground was muddy and wet we were both one our knees. We were slowly sneaking around looking out for bombs and bullets. This was one of the many things I hated about war. No matter what happened though I just had to get Freda back home safely.
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